全国英语四级作文试题：大学英语四级考试写作样卷分析之一

全国英语四级作文试题：大学英语四级考试写作样卷分析之一Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still Remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a poor job in my first preparation test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently my English teacher analyzed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My chemistry teacher also gave me a preci

3．大学英语四级考试写作样卷分析

下面我们以2005年6月全国大学英语四级统考评分样卷为例，针对上述作文题的评分标准进行具体分析。作文题后有五份样卷，每篇的分值均不一样，大家可以通过认真阅读，反复推敲，从而体会每份样卷所反映的不同的写作水平。

Directions: For this part you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic: Teacher’s Day. You should write at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

1． 颂扬老师的人品和对工作的态度；

2． 回忆曾发生在你和老师之间的一件难忘的事情；

3． 你打算如何报答自己的老师。

样卷1：得分14分。这篇文章内容上切题，思想表达清楚，文字通顺流畅，连贯性也很好，基本上无语言错误。

Teaching is the most glorious and respectable career. On Teacher’s Day I’d like to express my innermost appreciation and gratefulness to all the teachers in the world.

Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still Remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a poor job in my first preparation test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently my English teacher analyzed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My chemistry teacher also gave me a precious.jpgt. He told me not to be obsessed with the test results and encouraged me to find fun in study. Their help enabled me to survive the competition and will surely benefit me in the future.

Perhaps I’ll never have a chance to repay all that I have received from my teachers. But I’ll try to be a useful person and become their pride.

样卷2：得分11分。这篇文章内容切题，思想表达也很清楚，文字也很连贯，但有少量语言错误。

Teacher’s Day is coming. On this occasion I want to deliver my genuine gratitude to all the teachers.

I will never forget my class teacher’s devotion and care to me. Before National Entrance Examinations I was so nervous that I couldn’t focus on the books. I wasn’t confident about my ability. The idea of giving up even occurred to me. My teacher noticed my anxiety. Then she encouraged me and advised me a lot. However I still couldn’t calm down. So my teacher talked to me a lot. She told me how she overcame the obstacles of life when she was faced with important affairs.

Her words touched me a lot. And I began to face the exam with full courage and confidence. Luckily I achieved my exams successfully. I known it’s the result of my teacher’s love and care.

I will cherish the words of her through my life. I will try to face the difficulties in my life without hesitation. That’s the best way to return her love.

样卷3：得分8分。这篇文章内容基本切题，但有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字连贯性差，语言错误也较多，其中还有一些严重的语言错误。

Today is teacher’s day. I want to give best wishes to my teachers who assist me to learn and who shape the world to me.

I remember it was in 2001 I would have the chemistry olimpic competition for high school students. As the only girl in my class I didn’t have confidence to compete with my boy classmates. Mr. Wang who was my classmaster always encouraged me: “remember girls can do all things what boys can do.” Besides he helped me with my studies. Even during the winter vacation we could do some interesting small experiments at Mr. Wang’s home. What he made us known are not only some difficult questions but also the core for science the love for science and the courage to think and to ask questions. In brief Mr. Wang made us enjoy science rather than work just to win the game.

Today I am studying in university. I’ll always remember what Mr. Wang taught us I will work hard on my studies and remind myself to work for the benefit of humans.

样卷4：得分5分。这篇文章内容基本切题，但思想表达不清楚，连贯性差，有一些严重的语言错误。

Today is Teacher’s Day. Happy Teacher’s Day my teachers.

In the evening all of my classmates and I make a party for our teachers. In the party each of us give prerents to teachers and hope them feeling happy and healthy. Then teachers and us play together. All of us feel very happy.

I also remember when I was in my midschool my English teacher help me to study English. At that time my English is very poor. Although I studyied it day and night it seemed wother and worther. Then my English teacher told me that the way I studying is worry. He told me the right way and helped me friendly everyday. With his help my English became better and better.

Teachers are also friends for us. I think I must study hard to repay my teacher.

样卷5：得分2分。这篇文章逻辑混乱，条理不清，除极个别句子外，内容基本无法理解，有很多严重的语言错误。

Teacher’s Day. Happy Day. I hope teachers feel luck. I believe it is time we elevated the teache to the space where it belongs thereby setting an example to the people to teacher’s attitude

Remember when I was a young boy . I am a outrageous boy. In the classroom I have been observed to throw something across the court without conside such a move might have angry someone in their seat. Therefor my teacher Mr. Li always smailed to me. She often talk to me. You like athletic like Jodan. I feled happy. She tall me when class is over Don’t do it in class. We can play toghte when class is over.

Not so just I sometims throw something at someone yet. But I can remember my teacher’s words. Don’t do it!

Is there enough helps to help secure me future? I certainly think so. Thanks teacher.

Teacher you may soon see and possily feel difference in you reaction I am going to a teache to help some students like me. Acturally I will become syudent’s good friends.

资料来源：李华田主编《四级写作》，新大学英语四、六级考点透视丛书/李华田主编，武汉大学出版社，2006